If you're going to have a call out with an interesting fact about your company, product, or organization, make sure that it isn't too vague. Ask yourself, "could my competitor paste this on their marketing material without chancing a single thing?" If the answer is yes, then rework the copy and make a better pitch. For example:
Pretty sure this isn't a statement unique to WTS. Plenty of seminaries can say the exact thing. It is like saying, "Our graduates have jobs..."
A simple fix would be to take the vagueness away and give a number. Even small numbers or ball-park number would make this more interesting, engaging, and unique to WTS.
"More than 15 alumni serve a presidents..."
"Over 200 alumni serve or have served as.."
"15% of all seminaries around the world have WTS alumni serving as..."
Don't be too vague.
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